Thursday, April 26, 2012

Project Text

Literary Analysis
In one way or another, people respond to the arts.  Audiences may applaud a dancer, gripe about a book or a film, or give a standing ovation to a musician.    Because the arts are complex, writing about them requires, in our case, careful reading.    You probably know a good deal more about narrative techniques than you are aware of knowing.  Until we are asked to write about a narrative carefully, most of us read them with unconscious ease, just as we ride a bicycle without precisely knowing how we do it.  This however, does not allow you to hold things up to scrutiny, to analyze or improve your understanding.  The main purpose of this form of writing is to share some insight about a work to the reader.  In order to be successful you have been asked to frame the time period and know the work.
Frame the time period:  The can be accomplished by asking what was going on during this time frame that the author incorporated into the text.  The resulting research material found can help support a point. Or it can help in understanding a point being made.   Make sure to take good notes much of this data can be used as primary evidence.  Make sure that you use reliable sources.    
Know the Work:  Reading a text more than once is critical in creating an analysis. The first reading is to gain an overall impression.  The next read and annotate.   The second time through look at the author’s style, the way he/she created the setting, the characters, the theme or the plot.   Make sure to take good notes and evaluate everything you read.  This step will help you to refresh your memory as you attempt to formulate ideas.  
Terms to remember:
Theme is the statement about life that a particular work shares with the reader. It is the controlling or dominant issue or idea.  It can sometimes be stated or it can be implied.  A theme must be expressed in a complete statement (i.e. in…the theme of jealousy is used to show the demise of mankind). 
Symbol an object, place characteristic or phenomenon that suggests one or more things (usually abstract) in addition to itself.  For example the dove is a symbol of peace. 
Imagery refers to the words or phrases that a writer uses to paint his canvas and appeal to the reader’s senses. 
Antagonist is the person or thing working against the protagonist.
Character analysis may analyze the internal conflict that character has with the theme.  Conflict is the problem or struggle in the story that triggers action.  There are five different types of conflict. 
Person vs. person: one character iin a story is in conflict with one or more of the other characters.
Person vs. society: A character is in conflict with some element of society, the accepted way of doing things
Person vs. self: a character faces conflicting inner choices.
Person vs. nature: A character is in conflict with some natural happening.
Person vs. fate: a character must battle what seems to be an uncontrollable problem. 

Project Text
Project Text:  You are asked to interpret a major text through close reading and research.  Our “text” is A Lesson before Dying and Invisible Man.  We’ll approach this text through a number of critical sources, classroom discussions and activities, individual student essays, and group projects. 
Project Text will allow students to explore students to explore the larger implications of the subject of analysis.  It will also allow students to move comprehensively and critically into the final research paper.  Project Text should culminate in at least 2,000 words draft processing. 

Writing Assignment
Writing Assignment:
Using the selected text for your course, select one of the following areas; Character analysis, Theme or Symbolism and write a literary analysis.
Character analysis:   Most students can analyze characters rather skillfully. Perhaps that’s because well drawn characters are like real people, and we respond to them with the expertise of a lifetime of knowing people.  Create an essay in which you look at an internal conflict, a moment of clarity or personality development.
Symbolism:  an object, place characteristic or phenomenon that suggests one or more things (usually abstract) in addition to itself.  Select one symbol and write an essay showing the meaning and importance of the symbol.
Theme: Identify the theme of the novel and show the different ways this idea is expressed and supported and developed in the novel.
 As you plan and pre-write think about the scope of the issue; try to identify causal chains.  All final packets (hard copies) and final copy must be handed in (during class) and posted on the blog by 5p.m. on the due date.

Planning and Pre writing
Use K.W.L., and cubing prewriting technique to generate details.  After examining your raw material identify two or three points (thesis statement) that might focus an essay.   Your prewriting should identify the purpose, audience and point of view on the selected subject. 
Peer critiques – you must have at least two critique (for the hard copy), four blog responses and one lab review of your essay.     Voice/ tone, audience, meaning, evidence, structure, and organization are the areas readers must comment on.




36 comments:

  1. Kelsey Crone
    PAS 114 B
    Tuesday and Thursday 8-9:15am
    Peer critiques: Justin Boyd, Lindsay Brown, and Alex Conway

    Literary analysis: Being A Stranger To Yourself


    http://kelseycrone.blogspot.com/

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    2. Justin Boyd
      Critique: Being a Stranger to Yourself
      • Voice: The voice was very clear and precise. From the start of the essay I understood where you were going and how you came to the conclusions that you arrived at. Although, the thesis confused me. A small bit of polishing on that would help the reader follow that but aside from that the voice was good.
      • Audience: The essay was written very well in this aspect because there was background provided and a great amount of story for the invisible man.
      • Detail: The detail was good. There were sufficient quotes and explanation used. All was explained. Some of the detail became lost within the summary of the story. I felt as though some of the descriptions came straight from the book. Some creative explanations could have been used but the descriptions did not take from the essay.
      • Symbolization: The symbolization of the lights is well done but could have used some more elaboration. The explanation of the color of the buildings and the paint were done well. I partially understood the point behind the lights and why he loves the light but I am still not fully clear on why.
      • Structure: This area I felt was not as good as others. I personally would not recommend starting an essay with a quote but that’s my opinion. I would like the concluding paragraph to be longer but other than that all else seemed fine. The paper is overall great.

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    3. Peer Critique for Kelsey from Alex

      Structure: While reading this paper the reader may have a hard time following the train of thought because of the grammar and sentence structure. The paper need to be edited.

      Organization/Evidence: Throughout this paper the reader may get confused with the way it jumps between America and the world. A question the reader may ask is where you got your sources and information from. Without this the information seems more of an observation, which is good but it needs facts to back the paper up.

      Voice/Tone: Your tone was right for this paper. One thing that needs to be pointed out is the paper doesn’t flow as well as it could, due to sentence structure and punctuation errors.

      Audience: Your audience will definitely know your describing poverty and its associated space.

      Overall this paper has good information and great observations, but needs to be reworked “edited,” to make it flow better.

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  2. Justin Boyd
    PAS114B
    Tues and Thur 8-9:15am
    peer critiques: Anna Osuna, Kelsey Crone

    Literary Analysis: Briefcase and transition
    http://kneets.blogspot.com/

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    1. Kelsey Crone
      PAS 114

      Voice/Tone:
      The voice is very strong throughout the entire story. I really like the impact your connections make on the reader.

      Audience:
      As a reader, I get drawn into how such a simple object (the briefcase) has a much larger meaning behind it. I love how you make the connection between the briefcase and the mind.

      Meaning:
      The meaning of the briefcase is very well thought out and very interesting to read.

      Evidence:
      You use a lot if in-text citations which is very good. Having so much information shows that you actually know what you're talking about.

      Structure/Organization:
      Even though all of the information is completely relevant to your paper and main points, you seem to repeat yourself; more towards the beginning. Also, when mentioning Mary and him smashing the briefcase, make sure you keep the same info all together.


      On a side note, there are some grammatical errors, but they are easy to spot as soon as you re-read it.

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    2. Anna Osuna
      25 April 2012
      Professor Broadous
      PAS114B
      Peer Critique of Justin Boyd
      Voice/ Tone:
      • The introduction could have been more direct but the obvious idea of the message you trying to portray through the briefcase and transient is apparent.
      • A few of the sentences in the introduction seemed to drag on and were run on sentences.
      • The voice of paper was strong and informative but I feel if the overall introduction is stronger your voice would grow.
      Meaning:
      • The meaning of the essay was that the briefcase contained the narrator’s personality and symbolized his mind. I felt the essay was more informative then passionate.
      • If you brought out more of the personality of the character opposed to just focusing on the briefcase you could show the true affect and trauma afflicted on the invisible man. For example you say “ a form of racism” but what kind of racism do you mean. Elaborate on the meaning of things instead of just being so straightforward and direct. Add a little bit of color to it and bring the briefcase and the invisible man’s outrage off the paper.
      Evidence:
      • The evidence was strong and I have nothing to complain about it.
      • Evidence was relatable to the text and you made sure each statement was backed up with information but in the middle I feel I became lost with the true meaning of your argument more in the second paragraph.
      Organization:
      • The organization was good besides the introduction as I mentioned before everything flowed.
      Structure:
      • I would suggest to read your paper out loud it helps catch grammar errors!
      • There were a few run on sentences and incomplete thought but not too many
      Overall, the essay had a good meaning I enjoyed the symbolism of the suitcase being the invisible mans mind but I felt there was something missing. I felt as you could of really grasped the subject more then you did. I would go back and revise a few parts but overall I found the paper interesting and informative.

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  3. Anna Osuna
    PAS114B
    Tues and Thur 8-9:15am
    Peer Critiques:Ana gonzales,Zenaida Navarro,Justin Boyd, Juven Maldondao

    Literary Analysis: Yearning for Identity
    http:://annaelisaosuna.blogspot.com

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    1. I think you essay was very well developed. I can tell by the way that it was organized and the deep analysis that you actually dedicated some time to this project and were even interested. I think you have great evidence for your essay. You really broke everything down and I was able to see and understand why it is that the narrator was an invisible man and people like the grandfather and Dr. Bledsoe were “not invisible.” I think that all you did a pretty good job in developing all six of the categories the only problems I saw were some grammatical errors and the sentence structure could have used some improvement, but other than that it was a really good essay.

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    2. Ana Gonzalez
      Professor Broadous
      PAS114B
      25 April 2012
      Peer Critique
      Voice/Tone:
      Anna I think that you have a strong voice in your paper because you always defend your topic and you sound sure of what you are trying to say. It was obvious to me that your analysis on Invisible Man was that people undermine themselves rather than just accepting who they are. Good Voice!
      Audience: I got a little confused on towards who the paper is directed. I think that you should make sure that you direct towards a certain audience.
      Evidence: You used man quotes from the book which is good and you explained every single one of them. You also gave the reader a few background info. facts. I like the way that you explained everything to the reader.
      Meaning: The paper made sense, but it was almost like you were presenting information without making a thorough explanation or analysis of the facts. I think you should elaborate on explaining what you mean better.
      Structure:
      Your paper is good so far, but I think that you need a good conclusion that acts as a closure to what you are trying to say. I think that you should also have a little bit more sources and compare the events that you presented with events that happen now.
      Organization:
      The essay was well organised, but it needs more detail or at least more ending paragraphs. I think that you introduced and briefly explained quotes which is good, but not perfect. I think that you should add a little more detail and a better ending.

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  4. Justin Boyd
    Professor Braodous
    PAS114b
    April 25, 2012
    Critique: Invisible Man
    • Voice: The voice was very unclear. I could not understand the point of view nor the main focus of the essay. There was the use of “we”, which I do not personally recommend. The main point of the essay was unclear in the beginning but began to narrow and specify towards the end.
    • Audience: The essay did not seem as though it was directed to anyone specifically. The events talked about were explained well and there was nothing that was very confusing, although some points I had to reread to understand.
    • Detail: There was a good amount of detail when explaining the characters and how the times within the book related to the time around the book. I would have liked to see more detail so that the few kinks I came across would be better received. The details for explaining the quotes could have been more elaborated on.
    • Symbolization: The essay seem like it was solely focused on Dr. Bledsoe’s position and not him as a whole. There were good examples of how he still holds no power but there should be more in depth about him and how he develops throughout the story. For a story that constantly talks about Bledsoe it does not cover as much as I would have thought.
    • Structure: The structure was the essays biggest problem. The essay is incomplete and so I am left with no closure. There were no outside sources, which was a part of the instruction and there were no comparisons to how Bledsoe can relate to the outside world. The thesis was solid but the introduction paragraph could use some more work. The essay overall could use work.

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  5. Alex Conway
    PAS 114B
    Tues and Thurs 8-9:15
    Peer Critiques: Lindsay and Kelsey

    Project Text: Racism as an Obstacle to Individual Identity
    http://searchingforonesidentity.blogspot.com/

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  6. Cindy De la Rosa
    PAS 114B
    Tuesday and Thursday 8am-9:15am
    Peer Critiques: Yajing Zhang and Brenda Mendez
    Project Text: Blindness and Invisibility
    http://cindydlr.blogspot.com/

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  7. Michelle Pornsiritara
    Facing Injustice with Dignity and Courage
    PAS 113B: Tues./Thurs. 11AM - 12:15 PM
    http://michelle-lee-lee.blogspot.com/

    PEER REVIEWS: Shayla Brown, Jenniffer Ochoa, Lucy Balian, Hannah Won

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  8. Zenaida Navarro
    PAS 114B
    Tues and Thur 8-9:15am
    Peer Critique: Ana Gonzales, and Anna Osuna
    http://llayasays.blogspot.com/

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    1. Ana Gonzalez
      PAS11B
      Professor Broadous
      25 April 2012
      Peer Critique
      Voice/ Tone:
      I think that your voice was a little bad. I think that you could work on focusing yourself on the theme more. I think that you need to sound sure of what your saying. I would work on that.
      Audience:
      I am a little unsure of who your audience is.I think that you paper is just general and it doesn't really explain who its for. I would improve this as well.
      Evidence:
      You have good evidence from the book. I think that you should include outside sources as well because it was part of our assignment.
      Meaning:
      I think that you paper made sense, but you should stay focused a little bit more on topic. I like your point because it was my point too, but try to stay on topic.
      Structure:
      I think that the structure of your paper could be improved on because you need to organize the information that you are presenting. I think that you need to lay out everything a little bit better.
      Organization:
      You paper was not that well organized. I think that you should start by putting everything that you think that falls behind the same idea together. I like your paper, just introduce it better.

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    2. Overall your essay was good and caught my attention. The essay was well organized but could use some work on the structure. I noticed sometimes you lost focus on the point maybe because you elaborated to much on another point. I found the symbolism of the doll was interesting because of what it represented. you were very informative however I felt as your sources could of been better. I really enjoyed reading your paper it did not bore me. nice work!

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  9. Yajing Zhang:Analysis of The Invisible Man
    PAS 114B Tuesday/Thursday 8AM-9:15AM
    Peer critique:Cindy Delarosa, Brenda Mendez, Anna Osuna, Ana Gonzalez
    http://yajing-yajing.blogspot.com/

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    1. Ana Gonzalez
      PAS 114B
      Tuesday/ Thursday
      8:00 am-9:15 am
      Response:
      Yajing, I think that your essay was very good. However, I couldn't identify your thesis.I think that your essay consisted more of a narration than an analysis. Also I like the way you described the examples in book, but don't forget to use quotes. I think that you should make your audience a little more evident because I am not really sure who you are writing to. I also think that you should give a little more explanatory details. Overall, great job!

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    2. I thought your essay was well written and creative. However like Ana I did not really understand your main point of your essay. It felt like me you were summarizing the book rather then really focusing on one issue. You weaved quotes into your essay very smoothly and made good use of you information. I agree with Ana again I have no idea who you are addressing. Your writing is very good though and I always enjoy your writing!

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  10. Sunshine Decosta Chatman
    PAS113B
    T/TH 12:30pm-1:45pm
    Peer Critique Victoria Ruiz, Monikke Oroco
    Respond to Vanessa Favela, Jason Suh
    http://sunshinedecosta.blogspot.com/

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  11. Ana Gonzalez
    PAS 114B Tuesday/Thursday 8:00 AM-9:15AM
    Peer Critique:Zenaida Navarro, Anna Osuna
    Responses: Yajing, Justin
    Literary Analysis
    http://gonzalezana1105.blogspot.com

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    1. Peer Editor: Zenaida Navarro
      Writer: Ana Gonzalez
      PAS114B
      26 April 2012

      Peer Critique
      Voice/Tone: I think your tone in this story is more layback I feel like you could have done more to sound about more certain about your information and analysis.
      Audience: Well because its homework I feel like the person you are talking to is the teacher but I would definitely also go for an older crowd because you do a good job in analyzing and also this is a pretty mature book.
      Evidence: I think you have a good amount of evidence in your essay you can always provide a bit more but I think this does a great job proving your point.
      Meaning: I believe that this story’s meaning was very loud and clear because it is talking about power and how power played a role in this book.
      Structure: The structure on this essay is great you back up all your information of topics with great evidence making and then you go on to analyze it making it an over great analytical essay.
      Organization: This essay is very well organized and put into play because everything follows one another in chronological order.

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    2. Response:
      Ana, I like your essay! You did a great job of summaring the novel in the first paragraph. The entire structure of the essay is very clear. Obviously, you analyzed the themes of the novel. After reading your essay, I understand the power in this novel through many different aspect. I like how your arrange your essay that you use numerous example and characters to elucidate the theme of power to your audience.
      One part you should revise is in the first paragraph. Before the thesis statement, it is a little bit confused that whether you are doing the character analysis or the theme analysis. Other than this, your essay is perfect!

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    3. Anna Osuna
      Professor Broadous
      PAS 114 B
      23 April 2012

      Ana Gonzales Peer Critique

      Voice/ Tone:

      ● You had a strong thesis statement because you automatically let the audience
      know your standing point and what you were going to express in the paper

      ● You supported the prompt you chose to focus on the theme of person vs. society
      in the book I believe.

      ● I think if you provided more evidence you could support your evidence better

      Audience:

      ● You spoke to the audience well in the beginning I got lost with your focal point
      of the essay but you regain your focus later you might want to make your first
      couple of paragraphs clearer so the audience does not get lost.

      ● I think your paper was informative and straight forward and attracted the
      audiences attention

      Evidence:

      ● The evidence is strong, the quotes you chose from the book support your
      statement of people vs. society.

      ● A suggestion is that you should try to focus on different parts of the book to make
      your point even stronger for example the brotherhood.

      Structure:
      ● The structure of the essay is organized besides some paragraphs that would maybe
      work better with the pervious like the second and third
      ● I am not sure if Authority looks good being capitalized it is distracting to me
      personally so maybe it will be the the reader.

      Organization:

      ● Your paper used a broad vocabulary in compared to many other essays I have
      read

      ● I never got lost during your essay besides the evidence in the second paragraph
      can be confusing but you get back on track the next paragraph after.

      Meaning:

      ● The meaning is clear that the power between races in society is unfair and unclear

      ● The meaning is also straightforward and not sugar coated and very informative. It
      makes the meaning stronger because you have evidence and drive behind it

      ● Overall your essay was good I think if you decided to go back and add even
      stronger evidence your paper could even be better. Branch out to other areas of
      the book so you can show many parts of the book support this theme not just one
      character. The organization was neat and easy to read.

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  13. Myee Tillis
    PAS113B
    Tues. Thurs. 12:30-1:45
    peer edited by Roberto, Linda, Amanda, Victoria
    http://emilyloveprojecttext.blogspot.com/

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  14. Ne`kia Moore
    PAS 113B Mon/Wed 8:00-9:15 a.m.
    Peer critique for: Christina Payne, Breana Thompson, Monica, Taffy
    http://nekia.blogspot.com/

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  15. Stephanie Lopez
    PAS113B Tue/Thursday 11-12:15
    http://stephlopez0328.blogspot.com/

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  16. Creole Green
    PAS 113B TU/THUR 12:00-1:45
    Peer critique for Stephen&Amanda
    Peer Responses:Victoria Ruiz & vanessa favela
    http://Beautifulcre.blogspot.com

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  17. Imelda Rodriguez
    PAS 113 Tues Thurs 11-1230
    A Lesson Learned
    Peer Critique:Stephanie Lopez, Janelly, and Lucy Balian
    http://imeldarodriguez4.blogspot.com/

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  18. Janelly Jauregui
    PAS 113 Tue-Thu
    Self-Respect and Dignity
    Peer Critique: Stephanie Lopez, Imelda Rodriguez
    http://janellyjauregui.blogspot.com/

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  19. Deanna Jones
    PAS 113B Tues/Thurs 11-12:15
    Throw Away People
    Peer review:Sonya Wallace, Victoria, Imelda, Stephanie
    http://pas113b.blogspot.com/

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  20. Christina Payne
    PAS 11B Mon/Wed 8-9:15
    http://christinapaynee26.blogspot.com/
    Peer Edit: Ne'kia Moore, Breana Thompson, Monica Diaz, and Bryana Ramirez

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  22. Taffy Hui
    PAS 113B Mon/Wed 8:00-9:15 a.m.
    Peer critique for: Bryana Ramirez-Macias, Rayan, Ryan, Nekia
    http://xaznhippotaffyx.blogspot.com/2012/04/project-text-draft-2.html#comment-form

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